Nice! Fixed. I'm just gearing up for the first battle of Chapter 14 now; my LOV kinda sucks and these unholy spirits are absolutely wrecking Arthur (weak to magic) and Hermina (weak to light) before I can even get in range, and the poisonous swamp isn't really helping either.
EDIT: Random question of the day: Is there a reason why Arthur can't wield the sword Ama-no-Tsurugi? It doesn't use the katana icon so it is presumably a straight sword of the type he wields. Is it just meant to be a non-equippable boss-only weapon like Soul Reaper?
Notes:i.imgur.com/IureOfN.pngWhen you think about it, Buziba has stumbled across a pretty ingenious disguise. He's dressed like a stage magician, which already makes him look weird (and explains any oddly dressed bunny girls standing nearby), so people assume that's the only weird thing about him.
i.imgur.com/urezB3K.pngi.imgur.com/cLsG87S.pngi.imgur.com/183UmHv.pngAika is my favorite character. Seriously.
I was about to wonder how the author of the Guide to Monsters even knows about all these obscure and non-terrestrial species. Then I found the Lunarabbit Elite entry. That would explain it.
It wasn't really obvious what I was supposed to do after defeating the Lunarabbit Elites; I did eventually figure out that I was supposed to use the teleporter in the middle of the room, but maybe this could be made more obvious somehow, given that I started the last combat on it. For that matter, shouldn't the base panel for that fight have been in one of the doorways, where I entered from? Unless it's in the middle so it makes more sense when you later replay it, but...
i.imgur.com/xUVDxgq.pngThat's a really cool item! Mei doesn't really need to be able to see most of the time since magic isn't affected by hit rate and, well, her WPN sucks. The problem is... the main benefit from her unique set (toph+qipao) is increased WPN?
I keep seeing Lunarabbit Elites flipping their lasers back and forth between stun and kill, while fleeing. Maybe that attack needs a lower priority, or they need to not be able to set it back to stun mid-combat, or something?
Shizuka's Holy Barrier is so cool! Especially with a blood stone, Chihaya and some help from Bianca, she can soak up an awesome amount of damage which would otherwise have hit the squishy cloth-wearers. (She can soak up 200 damage in one turn from Tsusagi's meteor rain and survive! She even gets SOL build-up for Beckon Kami from it!)
i.imgur.com/m48gFFl.pngHahahahaha.
i.imgur.com/B1UGU76.pngThat sounds like an easily exploitable design flaw.
Aika's regular attacks are doing upwards of 150 damage to Lunarabbits thanks to the awesome power of Blood Harvester plus the rabbits' weakness to the Dark element. <3
i.imgur.com/n08TJGx.pngThis cave in the crystal forest hologram does nothing. Consider adding a line from Amara about how this isn't the den?
Tsusagi's Lunarabbit Elite Uniform (and by extension Amara's) is probably a little bit over-statted? Tsusagi gets 20% regeneration from it and has 870 BDY, which gives her a regeneration rate of 174 BDY per turn. The only way I can do that kind of damage is by spamming Force Strike (which I honestly think might be a slightly overpowered skill; it one-hit kills almost everything else and it did eventually do 1000+ damage to Tsusagi in a single back attack), or stacking WPN/HTR buffs with Beckon Kami. On the flip side, after about 8-10 turns, Tsusagi runs out of MND because of the -10% MND regen and stops being any kind of legitimate threat...
(That part could be resolved by giving her a 100 SOL attack which restores 100% MND so she can cast her spells again...
i.imgur.com/wxavVrz.png )
Tsusagi's elemental weakness is wind, but Aika's HTR (on my save file) is too low for any of her attacks to do more than 0 damage to Tsusagi (even with HTR++ she only did 36 with Kama Kaze), so that's not really an option either...
I mean, even this massive overkill force strike:
i.imgur.com/27qKWZ8.png only did about 500 damage.
i.imgur.com/q7fsm9m.pngSo much mood whiplash...
i.imgur.com/iBgA399.pngI just now realized that that's the silhouette of Koru. Boy does she ever have her fingers in a lot of pies.
Maybe I'm underleveled, or I need to invest more in LOV boosters, but it seems like the damage scaling on Unholy Smite and Unholy Wrath is *crazy*. Arthur takes 127 damage from Smite and he's got light resistance! (I guess he is a heavy armor type though, and the spirit had +HTR...)
Typos:i.imgur.com/qgHFwkh.pngThe word "the" gets cut off.
i.imgur.com/6B2UvoF.pngcombat enemy commander: combat the enemy commander
i.imgur.com/Krj0xv9.pngofficer Amara: Officer Amara [It probably looks better capitalized since it's a title?]
i.imgur.com/5sTt1K3.pngBizuba: Buziba
i.imgur.com/oyV2bBo.pnghow say: how to say
i.imgur.com/vUfc5w2.pngI nice: A nice
i.imgur.com/tzIETqx.pngsuppose: supposed
i.imgur.com/Aa1SoF6.pngI don't see: I don't like
i.imgur.com/yZsQrBO.pngmusn't: mustn't
i.imgur.com/xpo04z9.png"One a blonde boy and another ginger girl": Sounds a tiny bit weird because of the "another" and maybe because you only put 'a' before one of them. Maybe: "One a blonde boy and the other a ginger girl" or "One blonde boy and a ginger girl" or... something?
(side note: Hermina is ginger? 'Redheaded' I'd grant you, but I would describe her hair as more 'dark crimson' than 'ginger'. I'm just nitpicking for fun, it doesn't really bother me.
)
i.imgur.com/10PzNdZ.pngyour: you're
i.imgur.com/F95U0ZV.pngdecided: decide
i.imgur.com/TisdVui.pngThat's odd?: Not a question. Maybe replace the question mark with "..."?
up until now?: Also not really a question... maybe just a "."?
i.imgur.com/5f0CJDp.pngAdd a comma after "There".
i.imgur.com/b94pMyh.pnghas nose: has her nose (for example, "has had her nose stuck in a book all day")
i.imgur.com/AeAbQnB.pngWhile rhetorical, that second sentence needs a question mark.
i.imgur.com/MhY3tbu.pnglearedn: learned
i.imgur.com/N4GRPnS.pngall it is: all it is is (a rare case where a repeated word is actually correct)
proceedure to: procedure for
(This is why a tiny part of me is glad I wasn't born into a world of magic; if I'd grown up around it it might just be another part of boring everyday life. Probably not though.)
i.imgur.com/EL0siRc.png"Mochi mochi!": OK, so let me give you a quick lesson in Japanese language and culture. *adjusts imaginary nerd glasses*
From Wikipedia: Mochi (Japanese: 餅, もち) is Japanese rice cake made of mochigome, a short-grain japonica glutinous rice. The rice is pounded into paste and molded into the desired shape. [It's an important cultural food in Japan; there are myths about rabbits pounding mochi on the moon and stuff, which is weirdly relevant to the current subplot, but probably coincidence.]
"Moshi moshi?" is the thing you say when you pick up the phone. I'm not really sure where to point to as a source for this one, except "every anime I've ever watched".
i.imgur.com/7LRs8my.pngyour: you're
While rhetorical, a question needs a question mark; I think this should probably be "?!"
i.imgur.com/vAOTjci.pngin Seiwynd the first: in Seiywnd in the first
i.imgur.com/183UmHv.pngbunny-woman tell: bunny-woman and tell
i.imgur.com/bQfBINx.pngcould of: could've [or: could have; could of sounds the same as could've but is not technically correct]
i.imgur.com/2eyXiiK.pngpeople only met: people she only met
i.imgur.com/hlOQyb4.pngI'd love put such: I'd love to put such
i.imgur.com/Gh6lJPz.pngI don't know I: I don't know how I
i.imgur.com/kTpHih5.pngunder killed: under her killed
i.imgur.com/9bvMunM.pngfourty: forty
i.imgur.com/VY3OJJD.pngto lead us to Tsusagi is: to lead us to where Tsusagi is (or: to lead us to Tsusagi)
i.imgur.com/IzzvzIy.pngThis taken: This was taken
i.imgur.com/SXI2tWY.pngThat's a question, it needs a question mark.
i.imgur.com/eqI26Sj.pngcan't be unless: can't be, unless
i.imgur.com/SZgsUDA.png"A lunarabbit" is singular so use "is ostracized", not "are ostracized".
i.imgur.com/F80IJZi.pngover all: overall
i.imgur.com/PKDU2f1.pngsoceity: society
i.imgur.com/aUT08RM.pngsoceity: society
i.imgur.com/KGnyRkv.pngincosistencies: inconsistencies
i.imgur.com/HWL6ASm.pngfocus ending: focus on ending
i.imgur.com/ZdYUoks.pngwritten on back: written on the back
i.imgur.com/84cAwZm.pnginquiry: inquire
i.imgur.com/O7HGI0Z.pngElectrict: Electric
i.imgur.com/bTxjqkv.pngone of the moons Jupiter: one of the moons of Jupiter
i.imgur.com/ZmncRV5.pngYou have a semicolon instead of an L there. It's so obvious I don't think I even need to point out exactly where in the text it is. Don't worry, it happens to me too.
i.imgur.com/ychqy2V.pngwhat I may think is their leader: what I think may be their leader (or: what I think is their leader)
i.imgur.com/APJr6E1.png"faction to whom I'll always be indebted to": ditch one of the 'to's; either "faction, to whom I'll always be indebted" or "faction, who I'll always be indebted to".
i.imgur.com/GMF2OsK.pngFallens: Fallen
i.imgur.com/5aYjsOs.png"rather peculiar creatures that they": "rather peculiar creatures in that they" or "rather peculiar creatures that"
"conducts the": "conduct, which the"
"descension": That's not an English word. Somewhat annoyingly, I'm not sure there is a word like that; you're looking for the word that's the antithesis of "ascension", as "descent" is for "ascent"... so you have a few options:
Leave it as a made-up word, the meaning of which is fairly easy for native speakers to guess.
Change it to "descent", "descending", "Falling", or some other similar word.
Remove the word and leave it ambiguous in that paragraph: "conduct, which the price of breaking is [terrible/very strict/extreme/magically enforced]"; or just "conduct, which carries a price for breaking it", or something? The next paragraph explains it just fine without needing to use that word.
i.imgur.com/ATCSoTI.pngcast in disgrace: cast into disgrace
i.imgur.com/R614jQm.pngEither of: Either because of
factor of it: factor to it
i.imgur.com/mVJrPj7.pngwon't get a hint: won't take the hint?
i.imgur.com/iPfut7Z.pngMissing space.
i.imgur.com/UgUroQZ.pngNoone: No-one
i.imgur.com/kAznQjS.pngWhat's the hell: What the hell's
i.imgur.com/fAOGBZI.pngRefuse my best friend to be hurt: Refuse to [watch/let] my best friend be hurt
(Given it already happened once and this is just a holographic recreation, "watch" is probably more apt)
i.imgur.com/puLnPEG.pngnot how I remembered how that event ended: not how I remembered that event ending
would try fix: would try to fix
i.imgur.com/FKTgVxw.pnglatter: ladder
i.imgur.com/kY2V3fz.pngAdd a comma after "But no".
i.imgur.com/vPCGcjf.pngpunish you betraying: punish you for betraying
i.imgur.com/ORhdKtn.pngused to play to in: used to play in
even had built: even built
i.imgur.com/dR36TSb.pngsuposed: supposed
i.imgur.com/QdFiQ3r.pngread in to: read in on
i.imgur.com/bC8WDZJ.pngAdd a comma after Tsusagi.
i.imgur.com/oXwzGIq.png"you ever": perhaps "you've ever"?
i.imgur.com/0o6epsd.pngyou truly hate me: you truly hate is me (or, should be me)
It's my decision: It was my decision
lead to: led to
factioned: faction
(you're going to probably need to break this one up into multiple lines?)
i.imgur.com/47dovWo.pngLanuages: Languages
i.imgur.com/Y1c6KGj.pngbegun: began
i.imgur.com/2EAtW2H.pngdue: due to
i.imgur.com/fWNUtEW.pngIf I let you: If I had let you
uncheck: unchecked
would become worst enemy: would have become [my/our/Amara's] worst enemy (the "have" is probably optional, the other thing isn't)
I had arranged: I arranged (maybe; I think the had is probably okay but it's really fine without it)
i.imgur.com/zkBSRxk.pngI bring you: I could bring you
i.imgur.com/RthdZrt.pngfor empire: for the empire
i.imgur.com/PfSE12S.pngOn the previous line, which I missed a screenshot of: our people become: our people had become
i.imgur.com/wMiR884.pnghave been lost: has been lost? was lost?
i.imgur.com/aggwpeh.pngCongradulations: Congratulations
i.imgur.com/9zHN0o9.pngyou're: you've
i.imgur.com/rBCRz70.pngme martyr: me a martyr
i.imgur.com/T86MVHa.pngI rather: I'd rather
i.imgur.com/HbzWbhv.pngMother Ship: mothership
i.imgur.com/sbTKBzL.pnghas really down: has really been down
i.imgur.com/uE1LLOx.pngsomebody care: somebody you care
the gain: the pain
i.imgur.com/HoKHyI9.pngI think maybe "about." should be "about...!" ?
i.imgur.com/J1LpJvw.png"I officially declaring this": "I'm officially declaring this" or "I officially declare this"
i.imgur.com/QD9B53A.pngcan to do: can do to
i.imgur.com/49rSFYY.pngJust verifying if that is how Adalstan is spelled.
i.imgur.com/fAzQpx4.pngNeeds a question mark as well as an exclamation mark.
i.imgur.com/nrzJZkN.pngI have prior arrangement: I have a prior arrangement
Get rid of one of the "instead"s. Doesn't matter which, and no other changes are required, but you don't need both.
i.imgur.com/QzzRlxi.pngdelusion: delusional (?)
squating: squatting
i.imgur.com/gT2buQa.pngon the debt: onto the debt
i.imgur.com/dVCZMDy.png"that ignite five seconds of": "that will ignite within five seconds of" or "that will ignite five seconds after"?
i.imgur.com/xfpx52b.pnghe can't: he couldn't (I think? Or maybe "he wouldn't be trying to extort me if he was"?)
i.imgur.com/8Z0HDLu.png"he's quickly becoming EVERYONE's problem soon enough": "he'll become EVERYONE's problem soon enough" or "he's quickly becoming EVERYONE's problem".
i.imgur.com/x1ivEcV.pngI think you want a "some" between "with" and "sin". And maybe some quotes around "sin"? I dunno, it's really fine as is, just...
i.imgur.com/DFXLzAJ.pngI wouldn't anyone: I wouldn't want anyone
i.imgur.com/egkAyah.pngComma after yes.
i.imgur.com/fm98kkY.pngand require: and we require
i.imgur.com/GrMUg5G.pngChurch Goer can be one word, Churchgoer. If you like. It's fine as is, too.
i.imgur.com/RQqOOWa.pngaround her: around here
i.imgur.com/LvTQRXW.pngdestroyed: destroy
Remove the comma, I think.
anchors: anchor (since chains is the plural)
i.imgur.com/uxz6H6B.pngHabbit should be Habit.
i.imgur.com/NymzX20.pngwander the in: wander the world in
i.imgur.com/CvdP5Ut.pngwarrent excorcism: warrant exorcism
i.imgur.com/y12SFPK.pngits: it's
Bugs:After the LONG series of cutscenes following the Lunarabbit Elite fight, leaving the
Lunarabbit Elite room Mothership Bridge through the east or west doors door and re-entering through either door results in a permanent black screen.
i.imgur.com/dDar0GG.png[tile set issue I think:] You can walk on top of the first layer of the wall in the power supply room, except this one spot right here for some reason:
i.imgur.com/jrp6Nu4.pngi.imgur.com/cme6m1K.pngThis stays up permanently after using the Tsusagi's Picture item. [You can get rid of it by reading a book]
You can keep messing with Tsusagi's combination lock after entering the correct code, but nothing happens?
i.imgur.com/vfTeQi5.pngOnce you enter the crystal forest hologram, it's no longer possible to leave.
i.imgur.com/50CpwhH.pngTsusagi's dogtags looks to be a unique item which you have a 50% chance of missing?
I can't use Beckon Kami. I have no idea why. I have 100/100 SOL, I'm not already affected by it, and I'm targeting Shizuka who appears to be the only valid target for it, but I get an invalid target/error noise at the targeting step.
i.imgur.com/Pta3q1b.pngAika's Enhance MOV has no buff icon.
i.imgur.com/PicMN8v.png(right after the save point at the start of Chapter 14) Shouldn't something have faded in by now?
i.imgur.com/3h99HKC.pngOr at least by now? (later in that cutscene)
i.imgur.com/x1ivEcV.pngIt does fade in after the end of the cutscene but...
I probably posted this before, but you can still have this conversation when Shizuka's not in the party:
i.imgur.com/4D6FtIb.pngAnd this one:
i.imgur.com/3m7JseC.png [side note I only just realized Eizberg is a pun and I feel super dumb now
]
And this one:
i.imgur.com/ecwj4XK.pngTwo battles are possibly missing from the Chapter 13 teleporter menu: the optional power room and sleeping quarters ones.
i.imgur.com/J56rp95.pngIf you repeat the Bridge fight from Chapter 13 during Chapter 14, this picture pops up again (and stays up) after you win:
i.imgur.com/NeYnD8a.pngI can't cancel out of this menu any more, it just pops up again!
i.imgur.com/0OsR8Ev.pngEdit: One more bug... I just walked out the south entrance of St. Sayuri's courtyrd during Chapter 14, and got this cutscene which I think is from Chapter 8 or so, the one that introduced Alice?:
i.imgur.com/5Ho7FTT.pngFinally, and somewhat hilariously, after a slightly disjointed cutscene chain (I think because of various flags from the previous episode already being set...), I got stuck in the circus of all places:
i.imgur.com/Wy97Qj1.pngHere is my save file from just before the first battle of Chapter 14:
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